My initial thoughts before I present my This I Wonder essay is that I am nervous. I am not a public speaker and do not put myself in that situation if I don't have to. I hope that maybe some of the readers can relate in some way to my story. If they haven't been in this situation, maybe they will think of it when and if they ever are.
Standing up in front of everyone was not as bad as I thought. It helped that most of the class was not in attendance. I got picked to go first today after I ran up to the fourth floor and was a couple minutes late. The audience listened and laughed appropriately at my remarks through out my story and gave some great feedback to help me revise my essay. I added humor to a difficult situation and made the story human as to relate to my readers and bring out my personality. The suspense in the beginning good and my tone was a good approach. The main suggestion was that I need to add some more background details on myself at that time and explain where I was in my life at that point. I need to add more dialogue of how my husband reacted and that it was unexpected. The tense I used went between present and past so I need to be consistent with that. The conclusion needs to bring it all together about the pink lines. I will be working on this and feel free to add more suggestions.
Standing up in front of everyone was not as bad as I thought. It helped that most of the class was not in attendance. I got picked to go first today after I ran up to the fourth floor and was a couple minutes late. The audience listened and laughed appropriately at my remarks through out my story and gave some great feedback to help me revise my essay. I added humor to a difficult situation and made the story human as to relate to my readers and bring out my personality. The suspense in the beginning good and my tone was a good approach. The main suggestion was that I need to add some more background details on myself at that time and explain where I was in my life at that point. I need to add more dialogue of how my husband reacted and that it was unexpected. The tense I used went between present and past so I need to be consistent with that. The conclusion needs to bring it all together about the pink lines. I will be working on this and feel free to add more suggestions.